Changes made to our edition for Final Point 7:
Essay: We added more editions to compare and contrast with our own edition, but we kept the Pelican edition as our main point of reference.
In the Introduction, I made the writing not less colloquial but more crisp, as directed. I also took out the authorship question and just focused on Shakespeare himself.
We are working on the inclusion of Act I scenes 1-3 and the annotations and edits of the entire act.
The history section was reorganized so that it is easier to understand and has a better framework. The peer review helped to point out the weaknesses of the essay. There are stronger topic sentences and flows much more coherently and smoothly. I also added some questions at the end to prompt the student reader to make connections to Shakespeare’s motives, our cultural times, and their own personal situations.
In the Gender section of the end matter, I took the advice from the peer review and focused more on the issue of gender in regards to both Macbeth and his wife rather than just Lady Macbeth. I also made the text a bit more formal, while still attempting to maintain a conversation that would be easy for high schoolers to understand. I added textual evidence as well to support the claims made in the section.
In the Power and Politics section, I went through and clarified many of the sentences the peer review group had confusion about (this includes removing many unneeded thats and being more direct with my statements. I made sure the topic sentence was more accessible and the overall message remained consistent. I added more examples to make the topic clearer and more understandable, such as adding a more thorough comparison between Macbeth and Lady Macbeth, and Adam and Eve.
In the Staging and Adaptations section, I made sure to correct what I wrote as the Chinese version to Japanese. I also edited my writing and made sure it continued to have nice flow while being read.